Luclin Rising

Kaisept · 04-24-2008, 02:52 PM

I know, Luclin isn't directly in game. This is my immagining of how things might be up there on what remains. It's still a work in progress, and can be access from these google doc links, as I can not seem to make it fit.

Chapter 1 - http://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=dn...53ntvfnhq&hl=en

Chapter 2 - http://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=dn...6hdw72jf5&hl=en

Chapter 3 - http://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=dn...7fn662sdk&hl=en

Chapter 4 - http://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=dn...8fjg8gjhn&hl=en

niko_teen · 04-24-2008, 03:05 PM

I read teh first part of the first chapter and it looks promising .

If you're trying to post here i think it's a 5000 word limit per post so you'd have to chop the chapters into segments and post those. It does help for finding where you left off as the read when the posts are 3 - 4 pages long as opposed to scrolling through 15 pages of text to try and find where you left off.

I've got stuff to do but I'll definately come back to check it out some more later.

Jakimo · 05-03-2008, 12:28 AM

I have enjoyed your story very much, I hope there's more. The style reminds me of Edgar Rice Burroughs for some reason, and he has always been a favorite of mine. If I may offer a suggestion, when the story moves from the adventurers to Tam and back I was a little confused. Perhaps some way to make it more clear that the location has changed would help with flow. Just my 2 cents, it's a good story regardless. Thanks for sharing.

Kaisept · 05-05-2008, 12:56 AM

Thanks for the input, that's really what I was hoping to recieve. I've been considering the revision of the transitions so you're not off there at all.

04-24-2008, 03:05 PM	#2
niko_teen Loremaster Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: DC baby! Posts: 1,545	I read teh first part of the first chapter and it looks promising . If you're trying to post here i think it's a 5000 word limit per post so you'd have to chop the chapters into segments and post those. It does help for finding where you left off as the read when the posts are 3 - 4 pages long as opposed to scrolling through 15 pages of text to try and find where you left off. I've got stuff to do but I'll definately come back to check it out some more later. __________________ The often Misinterpreted and always Grumpy Ranger As SOE and I disagree on creative rights my series can be found at: theshattering.com

04-24-2008, 02:52 PM	#1
Kaisept Loremaster Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Big D Posts: 2	I know, Luclin isn't directly in game. This is my immagining of how things might be up there on what remains. It's still a work in progress, and can be access from these google doc links, as I can not seem to make it fit. Chapter 1 - http://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=dn...53ntvfnhq&hl=en Chapter 2 - http://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=dn...6hdw72jf5&hl=en Chapter 3 - http://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=dn...7fn662sdk&hl=en Chapter 4 - http://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=dn...8fjg8gjhn&hl=en

05-03-2008, 12:28 AM	#3
Jakimo Loremaster Join Date: May 2006 Posts: 33	I have enjoyed your story very much, I hope there's more. The style reminds me of Edgar Rice Burroughs for some reason, and he has always been a favorite of mine. If I may offer a suggestion, when the story moves from the adventurers to Tam and back I was a little confused. Perhaps some way to make it more clear that the location has changed would help with flow. Just my 2 cents, it's a good story regardless. Thanks for sharing.

05-05-2008, 12:56 AM	#4
Kaisept Loremaster Join Date: Apr 2008 Location: Big D Posts: 2	Thanks for the input, that's really what I was hoping to recieve. I've been considering the revision of the transitions so you're not off there at all.