RP introductions...and thoughs about them

[Droobie]

You hear a faint sound almost like wind as u look off into the darkness you see an image appearing out of it as u blink only to open your eyes to see nothing but darkness once more you look around infamously for the shadowy figure once more but after a few minutes you give up and start to stare at the ground..... suddenly you fell a slight breath on the backof your neck as you turn around you see a barbarian  after a minute or two of assessing you he introduces himself...... Greetings I am Droobie I Hail from Halas, son of Mithaniel and Erollisi Marr, Warden of Gorowyn, Member of Death Before Dishonor and its Mighty Horde how might i be of assistance......this is only a variation of my RP introduction i used to world of warcraft....but i stoped playing the wow version was.....<span class="text">You hear a faint sound almost like wind as u look off into the darkness u see a image appearing out of it as u blink only to open your eyes to see nothing but darkness once more you look around infamously for the shadowy figure once more but after a few minutes you give up and start to stare at the ground..... suddenly you fell a slight breath on the back of your neck as you turn around you see a Troll standing behind you he is wielding two blades one strapped across his back looks to be the jaw of a dragon sharpened into a unusually large sword you take a closer look at the blade and notice that it has a faint glow to it almost like it was engulfed in a faint fiery essence, on his waist is another blade not a large blade, a simple blade this one seems to be engulfed with the essence of ice. On his chest and legs are peaces of elaborately designed leather. Over his face there is a very odd shaped mask made of cloth and a meddle rim protecting around his neck strewn across his back there is a very elaborately made cloak fit for a king on it a figure is drawn of a cloaked man this appears to be his Guild Symbol. after a minute or two of assessing you he introduces himself...... Greetings I am Droobie I Hail from Sen'jin village, son of Vol'jin, Rogue of Orgrimmar Follower of the Orc Warchief Thrall, and his Mighty Horde how might i be of assistance......</span>

[Droobie]

any suggestions on how to make it better....(the barbarian one) or any criticisms about it either of them?

[Rinion]

<p><cite><cite>double post =/ oops</cite></cite></p>

[Rinion]

<blockquote><cite><cite>Droobie wrote:</cite></cite><cite><blockquote>Greetings I am Droobie I Hail from Halas, son of Mithaniel and Erollisi Marr, Warden of Gorowyn, Member of Death Before Dishonor and its Mighty Horde how might i be of assistance......</blockquote></cite><p><cite></cite></p><p><cite>Droobie wrote:</cite></p><blockquote>any suggestions on how to make it better....(the barbarian one) or any criticisms about it either of them</blockquote></blockquote><p>Was Mithaniel Marr a progeniter of Barbarians? I thought they led a group that became Humans from Barbarians.</p><p>Regardless, it sounds like your being introduced to a royal court, when really its a self introduction. Announcing your the son of gods seems rather pointless when it is common knowledge of what a barbarian is. Unless you were implying you are their actual son... which is really REALLY wierd... you know considering they are brother and Sister.</p><p> Also, you can't really Hail from Halas as anyone that is old enough to have lived in Halas in eq2 is likely dead.</p><p>I would suggest changing it to "I am Droobie, son of Halas, Warden of Gorowyn, and Proud Member of Death Before Dishonor. how might I be of assistance..." Saying you are a son of Halas implies you you havent forgoten the old ways and Halas remains in your heart, at least thats how I see it anyway.</p><p>leave out the horde crap, you arent a orc and I am sure your guild isnt a blood thirsty Band of Warriors out to prove themselves through battle.</p>

[Droobie]

ok thanks yah i am really new to game so some of the background is still very shifty to me thank u though that does sound better.....and yes i was sort of puting it like a kingly introduction .....gess it makes it a little more interesting than sup im Droobie lol......<div align="center"><b>Revised:</b></div><div align="center"><span class="postbody">You hear a faint sound almost like wind as you look off into the darkness you see an image </span><span class="postbody">appearing out of it you blink only to open your eyes to nothing but darkness once more</span><span class="postbody">you look around infamously for the shadowy figure but after a few minutes you </span><span class="postbody">give up and start to stare at the ground..... suddenly you fell a slight breath on the back</span><span class="postbody">of your neck as you turn around you see a barbarian  after assessing you he introduces himself...... </span><span class="postbody">Greetings </span><span class="postbody">I am Droobie, son of Halas, Warden of Gorowyn, and Proud Member of Death Before Dishonor. how might I be of assistance...</span></div>